Tuesday, April 11, 2017

Children's Story Draft


Naners the Chunky Monkey


It was always a routine, to have a banana to start the day.
Naners would sit on his favorite branch, sometimes he would even lay.
One day was different, he looked down at himself and turned into a state of shock.
"I've eaten to much!" He exclaimed and began to run around the block.
He came across an ice cream stand
The ice cream man said "Hi, what brand?"
He thought and he thought


(I kind of want to direct this story to not being self conscious and enjoying who you are in your body. I want Naners to make his own ice cream type called "Chunky Monkey" but I am open to any other awesome ideas!)

3 comments:

  1. It was always a routine, to have a banana to start the day.
    Naners would sit on his favorite branch, sometimes he would even lay.
    One day was different, he looked down at himself and turned into a state of shock.
    "I've eaten to much!" He exclaimed and began to run around the block.
    He came across an ice cream stand
    The ice cream man said "Hi, what brand?"

    Cute idea! This also has a great message behind it!I don't see anything you need to fix. You have a great start!

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  3. I wonder if you should spell his name Nanners?

    Some editing suggestions for what you have so far:

    It was always a routine, to have a banana to start the day.
    Nanners would sit on his favorite branch, sometimes he would even lay.
    One day was different, he looked down at himself in a state of shock.
    "I've eaten too much!" he exclaimed and began to run around the block.
    When he came across an ice cream stand, the ice cream man said, "Hi! What brand?"

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